Final Draft of #2

After reading my peer reviews of my second paper, I realized I still have some work to do. I had a conference with Elizabeth Murray on Tuesday as well, and she gave me some ideas to incorporate too. I need to add more visuals into the paper. So, this weekend I will take pictures of the elevators in action and paste them into the paper. Kassi really liked the elevator girls portion of the paper, but said I need a more in depth interview. Ashleigh, the other elevator girl, is back at school now, so I will interview her and get her input. I might even sit in with them this weekend to see them in action. I have done this before, but not during the research of this paper. Basically I need to be a little more in depth about the topics within my paper, and make my thesis a little stronger. I guess I still have some work to do.